Your poems are usually like a story,
And I think you would benefit more in these story poems by establishing the character's personality, and characteristic traits more thouroughly.
I think it would help the reader make a better connection to the poem.
Because right now they're a little disconected, if you get what I mean.

I love the lines "Still, goes on the
fever of need, for
both the lover and the
dead. Built on an empire
of morning kisses and
a nighttime touch. "

I do like it very much, and I think it's worth working on further!

Love,
Carly